Welcome, welcome, welcome to my final revision live. So guys, welcome, welcome, welcome to yet another live on YouTube.  So guys, going to be looking at language paper two and more specifically, quickly recapping firstly on structure, what to anticipate for tomorrow's exam and also in terms of writing out your responses and paragraphs, how you can approach, especially the question two and the question four, but also of course, when it comes to question number five, these are the three formats to anticipate tomorrow. I believe because the speech hasn't been asked since 2017, I think the speech has a really, really high chance of coming up, but also equally a letter. So what I'm going to do is obviously walk you guys through the structure and the approach for all three forms of writing, so speech, letter and article, and then I'm going to talk about some suggested topics to consider for tomorrow's exam, especially for question number five. Before guys, I literally show you a worked model answer, especially this was the 2022 exam, the June 2022 camping paper, right? So this is like the camping paper. Guys, thank you for offering the moderation, but no, I don't need a moderator, okay? Anyway, guys, so going to begin by recapping structure, recapping also question five, there's different forms of writing that you're going to be anticipated, and of course also topics to anticipate for tomorrow when it comes to question number five. Before I go over how to write a model response and how I put all of this together for the 2022 June paper, this is last year's paper, and because I actually think a speech has a very, very high chance of coming up tomorrow, I'm also going to show you guys a worked response that I did for the speech that came up in 2017, okay? This is the only time a speech has actually come up in the exam, so I'm going to show you guys how to approach it, okay? Guys, this live stream is going to literally be an hour and 30 if that, then I'm out, okay, guys? So I'm not going to try and keep you guys up for too long because of course you guys need to practice these questions, okay? So guys, thank you so much for joining in on tonight's live. I'm for one, I'm very excited about the exams tomorrow. And of course for you guys, this symbolizes freedom. Once these exams are over, you're done at least for English. I know that there's chemistry, there's maths and so on, but at the very least, tomorrow, for those of you in your 11, literally once you're done with your morning exams, that's it for English and the long road to freedom kind of gets closer, okay? So guys, I'm going to be moving fairly rapidly because I want to keep today's live to literally an hour and a half before I jet, okay? So as I mentioned, guys, always anticipate for your exam tomorrow, I've obviously five questions to complete in one hour, 45 minutes. The most challenging aspect of the paper two exam is that you have to do double the reading, double the writing in exactly the same amount of time as for language paper one, okay? So it's a little bit challenging because you're going to have to work on your speed reading, your speed writing. Now when it comes to question one, always anticipate that it's a multiple choice question. It's almost like a gift from AQA, okay? They literally just give you statements to choose from, pick for that correct, then you move on, they ask you to usually look at Source A, then you move on to Sessio A01, fairly straightforward, you shouldn't let that stress you out. Now for question number two, this is where you kind of plunged in the deep end in the sense that you're doing your first comparative question. However, in this question, you're simply writing a summary of either similarities or differences. Now for what I've seen in the past questions, a case from 2017, all the way to the 2022 exam, including the 2022 Reset, apart from I think one paper, question two tended to ask you to focus on and write a summary of differences, okay? So I think based on how AQA has structured these questions, I think question two and question four will probably ask you tomorrow to look at differences. However, the challenge of this question, which also tests your A01, your ability to synthesize information, is you've got to talk about and summarise both articles. So you're given a nonfiction Source A, nonfiction Source B, it can be autobiography, letter, speech, whatever, right? Same for Source B, it can be a letter, autobiography, speech, whatever. However, you ask to write a summary of differences and what you need to do is you need to integrate your discussion. This question is worth eight marks. Therefore, end to write at least one comparison paragraph, okay? And my suggestion framework when you are comparing and you're summarising either differences or similarities between this text is use the peel paragraph structure. That's my suggestion and this is how you integrate your comparison. Start your opening point using keywords from the question, but then saying we can see this is shown in Source A whilst this is shown in Source B for your differences or this is shown in Source A, keywords from the question. And similarly, we can see the same in Source B. That's your opening point addressing the keywords in the question. Now, in your evidence, I would suggest second step in your comparative paragraph, literally find a bit of evidence from Source A, contrast it with a bit of evidence from Source B, okay? Literally keep your comparison consistent in the same paragraph. Then in your explanation, you don't need to talk about technique, you just need to dive into how they're similar, how they're different. Do that for both Source A and Source B before you simply link back to the question talking about Source A and Source B. That, for me, I would say is the best framework and the best approach for the eight marker. This is question number two, your first comparison question where you're asked to look at the modern Source A and the Victorian Source B and find either a summary of some differences or some similarities. As I mentioned, literally, apart from just one past paper, all of the AQA past papers I've seen, literally, for question two and four, ask you to look at differences. I think you can maybe reasonably assume that tomorrow's exam will give you two extracts. There's somehow thematically linked as a theme that ties them both together, right? For example, the paper I'm going to be showing you guys is to do with the theme of camping, right? However, it's still to ask you to look at differences when you're summarizing Source A and Source B, okay? Anticipate you might be asked to look at differences again. Now, in question three, very similar in terms of its wording and in terms of its focus to question two in paper one because this is the language question. It tests your AOT or awareness of subject terminology. Subject terminology, especially in relation to language, is stuff like simile, alliteration, metaphors, hyperbole, nouns, verbs, adjectives, adverbs. This question is as well 12 marks. You want to try and aim to write, if not two-pill paragraphs, at least three, looking at different bits of evidence from different parts of the little part of the extract that you're supposed to focus in on, okay? So literally just start off with your point, talking about one source, evidence you quote, directly from the source, then in your explanation, this is where you incorporate technique and you then maybe zoom in and do some word-level analysis. When you say, for example, you know, the simile is bigger than bear, shows that this creature is massive, and then maybe you can say the noun, some zooming in bear, illustrates that this creature is maybe also terrifying, right? So this is also your word-level analysis that you need to include in question number three. Then simply finish off by linking back to the question, try and do this two or at least three times for the 12 marker tomorrow. Now question number four is the second comparative question. With question two and four, your approach is very similar. The only difference in question four is the second bit of point. So usually in question four you're asked, look up the whole source A, whole of source B. What are some differences or similarities, right? You're asked to firstly compare the writer's viewpoints and perspectives. Okay, so this is the writer's perspective question. But how are they similar or different? Now there's a second bit of point within question number four that always comes up. Compare the methods the writers used to portray the perspectives. Method simply means what words, what language, and what structure do the authors use to convey the different or the similar perspectives? Okay, meaning when you're answering question number four, literally you're taking the same structure as question to you. Opening of the point, talking about both sources, right? Source A and source B, how are they similar, how are they different? Then in your evidence, writer's perspective, what quotation are you selecting from both sources, okay? So saying source B. However, in the writer's perspective's question, in your explanation when you're talking about how are they similar or different, in this case what you want to do is also incorporate some either language observation or structure observation. Because as I mentioned, there's a second bit of point in question four that always comes up where you're asked to compare the methods the writers used to convey either the different or the similar perspectives. So you need to include that in your explanation for question four before you simply link back to the question. That's question number four. Now question five, which is now what I'm going to kind of launch into because it's quite important, it's the make or break mark, right? It's worth half of the overall paper's marks. This is where you're going to be asked, you're going to be given a statement. You don't get choice, you literally work with a statement. And you either produce a speech, letter or article in response to that statement. Now with question number five, it's worth half of the overall paper's marks therefore you definitely need to be spending between four to five to 15 minutes on this question. However, the best way to approach preparing for this question is knowing firstly the format of the different forms of writing. You'll letter your speech or article, and of course when then you're developing your argument and discussion, you need to use literary devices and persuasive devices. Now, quickly going over the different forms of writing you might be expected to produce tomorrow. You might be asked to produce a speech, right? I think the speech is very highly likely. As I mentioned, speech has only ever come up once, back in 2017. Letter came up twice in 2018 and also it came up in the Resit paper, the November Resit paper for 2022. But aside from that, letter hasn't come up. Article has literally come up for like three years in a row, right? So unless AQA wants to be super generous and give you yet another article then I would suggest maybe also pay attention to the layout of a speech in a letter, especially a speech, okay? Now, in terms of the layout, once you kind of clear a layout, it's actually really straightforward, right? So starting with a speech, always begin by addressing your audience. If it's a grown-up audience, ladies and gentlemen, if you're writing a speech for your peers, fellow students, then once you said, you know, hello fellow students, your first opening paragraph, look at the statement that you're given. So for instance, one of the past paper questions says there's no point in traveling to see the world. We can see all of these things on TV, etc, right? So it was to do with travel and there's no point of traveling. It's too expensive. It's unnecessary, etc, right? When you look at that statement, I would suggest the best way to approach question 5 is to kind of take a black and white view, right? So either you fully agree or you disagree. The reason being is because when you're now debating, if you fully agree, you then go into reason 1, 2 and even 3. But then also when you then consider how to balance your argument, you can now also add, say, 1 or 2 counter-arguments and show really, really clearly to your examiners that you're able to evaluate what you're presented with. You're able to also produce some kind of argument and some kind of reason to debate, okay? So my suggestion for question number 5, take more of a black and white view rather than say, for example, a history view or the view that, or the approach that usually teachers tell you to take for RE, which is like, I agree to an extent by also disagreeing in history. I agree to an extent by disagreeing. Sometimes what that does is it kind of confuses your examiner. They're like, okay, do they agree or do they disagree? It's not clear, right? But if you take kind of a black and white view, you first develop your arguments, argument 1, 2 and 3 and then you then say, actually however there's naysayers who disagree they would say argument 1, possibly argument number 2. That's my suggestion, okay? So get back to your speech. Start off by addressing your audience and then in your opening paragraph, saying where you stand on the debate. The statement that you're given, which side of the debate and which side of the argument do you stand on, okay? Make it black and white. Then you include your main points, maybe 2 or 3 paragraphs of your main points. When you're answering and developing your main points, irrespective of speech, letter or article add your direct address, so you're speaking directly to your audience. You pronounce like that or even inclusive pronounce like we. Also other literary devices to include are to make your writing come to life, right?   Of course, don't forget you're also incorporating your persuasive devices. Again, the persuasive device is going either your speech or your letter or your article. This is your made up statistics. According to Cambridge University, 75% of people who travel are really happy, for example your anecdotes. So here you focus in on one particular person, right? So, for instance, it could be Sally Smith, a year 11 student really enjoys travelling to France because it helps her decompress, it helps her feel less stressed out, okay? That's an anecdote. Of course, you can also give some examples. For example, going back to the travel example, I don't know why I like using this example, but for instance if you decided to go for, oh, there's lots of budget airlines, there's where's there, there's right there, there's EasyJet, whatever, right? Those are examples and of course you can even make up interviews. In an interview with the BBC, John Doe said, I like travel in speech marks, right? This goes in speech, letter or article. However, going back to this, start off by addressing your audience. Ladies and gentlemen, fellow students, if it's other students in your school or college, then opening paragraph you say where you sound the argument, this is a speech, then your main points, reason one, two and three, you agree or disagree, then you add your counter arguments because you need to show that any debate needs to have a consistent balance, so whilst you think one hand you also show an understanding that there's other people who would disagree with you, before you add your final conclusion, okay, so even if I've considered other perspectives, I still think I'm right and then final step in your speech, do not forget to thank your audience for listening, it's as simple as just adding one sentence. Thank you for your time and attention, I hope you've learned something new. That's speech, letter, start off with your address, made up address, okay, so say you're writing letter to the Minister for Education, okay, that was the recent paper question, write letter to the Minister for Education, talking about how education needs a radical rethink, so then your address could be mpjohnsmith, Warnworthsminster, Way, London, SW16, 5HB, for example, right, that's your made up address, then you add the date, just use the same date, you know, 12th June, 2023, then dare whoever, keep it formal, so dare mpjohnsmith, then your opening paragraph you're literally just doing the same as this, opening paragraph, we'll just have the argument you stand. Main points and in your counter, your anecdote statistics, examples and so on, counter arguments, why people disagree with you, also use some counter statistics, some counter examples, then finish off by saying in your concluding paragraph even if I agree, you know, even if I've considered why people disagree with me, I still think that I am right.  The final form that you might be expected to produce, which is very, very popular okay, so AQA has literally asked it for like three years in a row, is obviously an article, article shouldn't throw you off because it's been asked so many times, you've probably even done it for your mocks, okay, so article is start with your headline, take your words from the question, turn them into a charcoal question, then opening paragraph, again, you're literally following a similar framework, opening paragraph is you state where you stand, then you first add your first subheading to break up the text because in an article, either newspaper article, blog, online article, whatever it needs to kind of be easy for your readers eyes to glide over the text, so add some subheadings, okay, so maybe after your opening paragraph add your first subheading then add your main points, reason one, two and three why you believe your perspective is correct, here's an anecdote, here's a made up statistic, here's a made up example, you make all of these things up because you literally don't know which question is going to come up tomorrow, examiners know that you're not Einstein, okay, they're not expecting you to know literally all the possible statistics out there, of course if you know, then use them, but if you don't know statistics and stuff like that, then you don't have to, right, so for example, I'm going to give another example of where maybe you can use an actual worked example, so I was looking with one of my students through a sports question, sports should be fun, fair and open and we were thinking, okay, actually when it comes to sports, what can maybe you include and perhaps if you're already somebody who's like a very avid sports fan, you might think of examples when you're saying oh yeah, sports are not fun or fair or open you can maybe use, I don't know, examples of like Lance Armstrong who who wanted to win at any cost, right, so the British champion cyclist, there was then this huge doping scandal, you can maybe use that if you know, or for instance you can consider maybe other scandals that have come up in the past that you're like okay maybe I'm going to use that, but if you can't think of any actual current example just make up an example, okay and then, okay, so going back to article start off with a headline, a few paragraphs subheading, your main points with your examples anecdote statistics, whatever then second subheading before you introduce your counter argument so people will disagree with you again, try to also use counter anecdotes or counter statistics before you finish your discussion by adding your closing paragraph again, you know, even if I've considered why people will disagree with me, I still think I'm right, okay the actual body and what goes into all of these is literally the same opening paragraph, main points counter points, conclusion, okay the only difference is the speech, you start by addressing your audience, finish off by thanking your audience letter, you start off with your date then, you start off with your address then date, then dear, whoever go into your body paragraphs, then you finish off with kind regards, article start with your headline, then your opening paragraph subheading, then your main points second subheading, counter points before you close, okay, so I hope that's kind of easy in terms of how to do really, really well in this part of the exam, I think question five is actually quite easy to know, as long as generally you have a general understanding of topical issues, question five tends to ask you to talk about stuff that you're going to hear about in the radio and then the news anyway, things like is social media good for you, is travel important, is sports corrupt, is let's say for example, is it important for us for our teenagers, so this is one of the debates that a lot of people tend to sometimes have, are teenagers entitled are they spoiled, right, these are just general debates that you can anticipate coming up tomorrow, AQA is definitely not going to ask you very, very controversial issues, so I'm not going to say oh, Russia's war against Ukraine is really bad or war is really terrible, it's not going to be that contentious it's going to be stuff that it's not very offensive, right so if you take one view versus another it's not very emotionally charged, okay, so just be aware of what's going on in the news and so on, and these are some topics to bear in mind when you're preparing for tomorrow's exam as I said last year's exam in 2020 you talked about travel, so I would say this is probably it has a low chance of coming up again, okay this idea of travel is good, whether people should travel, whatever, I don't think travel is one of the key topics, you know, is travel good is travel bad, does it contribute more to pollution, whatever, I don't think that's going to come up tomorrow because it literally came up in last year's exam, however I think one of the topic areas to be aware of is to do with animals, animal cruelty, animal welfare, that's a topic that sometimes could come up, anticipate and have an opinion of what you could talk about, right another key topic area could be the idea to do with social media and technology, is social media bad for us, is social media making us more dumber, right, is social media corrupting us, is social media even destroying society as a whole, right we're always looking down on our phones rather than interacting with people near us, right we maybe sometimes even have a closer relationship with our virtual friends than we do maybe with literally our physical friends and family, right, that's a key topic area that's always kind of flaring up in a debate, is TikTok generation, you know you guys are part of the TikTok generation, is TikTok really bad for us, is it destroying society, right have an opinion on that, another topic area is of course education, AQA loves having education questions, I think education came up twice, education could be around, are qualifications worthless, is homework necessary, should uniform school uniforms change, have an opinion on that, I'm pretty sure especially because you're still in school you probably have a lot of opinions about that, another topic area could be environment and climate change, in fact climate change last year and the year before was actually a very hot topic and it became a hot topic especially during Covid when loads of cars were not on the road right, everyone was in lockdown and then in London for example I think pollution and air pollution went down by like something crazy like 60 or 70% right and then this triggered there's always this flare up of environment right, should we give up our cars, our plane is really bad, is environmental issues like is that something that we should pay attention to have an opinion on that, another topic area could be as I mentioned young people and their attitudes are young people entitled, are they the snowflake generation okay so for example I think I read an article ages ago about the garden called young people so people who are 16 and younger the snowflakes generation okay like you know they're saying that young people you know they're not really used to kind of any hardship and anything that happens you know they're a bit too sensitive right so young people way too sensitive, young people quite rude today, are they entitled, are they selfish is life too easy for young people that could be a topic area and then the final topic area is like this idea of like celebrities versus normal people rich people versus poor people, is society fair okay again having some kind of opinion about that okay so when it comes to question just be aware of just general topical issues, AQA will not ask you like really controversial topics stuff that is very emotionally charged stuff like war, stuff like you know possibly poverty but not like very highly emotionally charged questions, they will still kind of keep to like middle ground and these are some of the topics that are worth considering okay so that's that really when it comes to language paper 2 and what to anticipate for tomorrow's exam now what I want to do now is to show you guys how you can actually apply these approaches to the question paper that came up last year so this is the question paper that students in your position if you're currently in 11 sat when they were doing their exams at this time last year this is the camping paper so I'm going to do you guys walk you guys through firstly the extracts that came up what would go through my mind if I were answering the questions that follow but then also guys what I want to show you guys is a worked response that I've done so all the worked responses that I've done for all five questions but equally if a speech was to come up I'll show you a worked response that I've done for the 2017 exam that's the only time that the speech came up so just in case you want to see okay like you know if a speech comes up how can I lay it out how would it look like me applying all of these techniques what can that look like okay so guys I'm gonna now move this over and then I'll show you guys you know last year's paper I'll walk you guys through the extract what I'm thinking about as I'm reading it through and then show you my worked responses okay so guys I'm going to quickly check the comments last time my comment section glitched out so to be honest I'm going to just probably just power through and then maybe look and see if the comment section is working okay I feel like the comment section is not working it's kind of glitching out it was doing so last time for the paper one so I'm just going to dive straight into the 2022 exam okay so guys let me just put you here and what I'm going to do is I'm going to kind of read through the question paper or even for example the insert firstly and then walk you guys through how or what would be going through my mind if I were answering this question and this question paper okay so I'm going to zoom in just a little bit again I can't actually see comments so I'm going to try maybe to respond to comments after this slide okay because I literally can't see any comments my comment section keeps on glitching out I'm literally doing this on my phone so I'm going to just open so going over this question so remember obviously as I mentioned in paper two you always get two extracts okay and I'm going to zoom in even further now you always get the modern text and the Victorian text okay so let me just settle myself down looking at looking at source I'm going to show you guys how I would read the extract if I've seen this for the first time what would be going through my mind if I'm answering this question paper okay so I'd obviously begin by looking at the blurb source is an extract from the 10th bucket and me in which Emma Kennedy describes the camping holidays in France so this is the author in the 1970s okay that's the blurb that's the information that I've been given this is the context that I've been given to work with you know said my mother who as far as I could tell was the only person to be delighted to be back in France so that's the location we should treat this holiday as the occasion it is there's no point in being miserable holidays are what you make of them so now here we're being told that this is to do something to do with holidays holidays were not what you made of them holidays were in the hands of malevolent forces which means evil forces hellbent and wreaking chaos at every turn holidays were salt courses of the mind and body endurance tests designed to break spirits and shatter spleens so here what the speaker is saying is unlike what we think when it comes to holidays right summer holidays around the corner she actually is saying that holidays are these assault courses they you know that these endurance tests something that needs to be endured and it can break somebody's spirit and shatter spleens like holidays is really horrible for her in my nine years so she's nine years old on the planet I'd learnt one thing gun holiday was awful as we sat chugging along through the French countryside sunflies in the field and either side of us I thought yes it is nice to look at but in the same way that cheese looks nice in a mouse trap so she feels trapped right so she sees holiday in a really really unique way she sees holidays as almost imprisoning eventually we arrived at the campsite where we had stayed the previous year so she then now in this holiday site as is often the way when you revisit somewhere you've been before the law is not quite as sparkling the table tennis huts once an astonishment of riches is now a bit battered around the edges the pool a little more dull so here what they're saying is all of these things that you know used to be such a fun draw for her in this campsite it's kind of lost its appeal okay so it's now looking a little bit more dull so it's less appealing also she's using alliterative language here to show how she's very disillusioned really over the idea of holidays even my mother was forced to concede that the place has lost its gloss so it's no longer fun or exciting it isn't as quite as nice as you remember it she said hands on hips still at least it's a bit cooler what a relief so the mom is like really really keen to be like very very like optimistic have an amazing time storm clouds gathering over there said dad so now here there's a shift in focus okay so here the author is like okay so now it's getting darker and storm is gathering looking up to the west that'll explain the drop in temperature still I'll get the tent up I'll pitch back onto a line of trees that act as a windbreaker between us and the river I wanted off tiptoeing through the branches to sand the water's edge the low evening sun was casting a pink tinge now here she's using more pathetic fallacy so there's pathetic fallacy initially here the weather reflecting the mood and this is a change in focus but then there's even more pathetic fallacy here maybe there's a shift in her own mood that's being indicated so the low evening sun was casting a pink tinge across the water and dragonflies were hovering picking up a round flat stone I skimmed it across the surface of the lake watched with satisfaction now here she's playing around she's playing around with this round flat stone as it bounced away sometimes it was the simplest things that provided the greatest pleasure so here she's now starting to really take enjoyment in this holiday and as I stood throwing stone after stone I felt real contentment as if I were actually enjoying myself I returned to our pitch having been called to supper by my mother dad was staring skyward these clouds are shifting so he distilled that threat of rain we might get some rain after all I can't remember the last time I saw rain answer my mother it must be well over a month it will be nice clear the air suddenly so now there's a definite shift there was a squall of activity she uses this onomatopoeia to show that people are panicking over the campsite as the sky darkened more pathetic fallacy and the rain began to fall and thick steady drops caravan awnings were being winched in windows slammed shut towels were being hastily gathered around gathered and everywhere families were retreating to the inside of the tent so everyone's running away because the ground was so dry the patter of rain on the hard earth again more onomatopoeia sounded almost metallic and each raindrop sparked a plume of dust so fine it looks like steam making the soil look as if it were boiling so lots of similes used here in the distance a low rumble of thunder more onomatopoeia so she really really relies heavily on lots and lots of onomatopoeia low rumble of thunder began rolling towards us the starter flag for any decent storm and the rain which had individual random quality became more pack like shifting shapes like a flock of starlings so the rain is now kind of being described as this predator the storm was circling the area before clattering in to do its worst so now you've got the rain here which is like described as almost in moving in this pack and also we've got a simile here showing this rain but equally here this hyperbole the rain is almost coming in to really really cause havoc and chaos the storm was circling the area before clattering in to do its worst and of course actually in this case it's the storm soon the rain was slashing down the relentless battering against the tender canvas loud and frightening so here we can see that there's this sudden shift in weather and in the mood now carrying on so now it's like super super rainy how does she react to this despite all my father's best efforts to waterproof the tent and lay the ground sheet properly water will start in to seep in so now the water is coming in to the tent nature is really attacking them the ground so dry from so many weeks that moisture couldn't cope with the sudden onslaught and the campsite rapidly turned into a series of streaming rivers it's like completely drenched in space not wanting to get our bedding wet we bundled our sleeping bags together at the camping table just outside the sleeping compartment with nothing to sleep in the water ever rising so here they're literally being trapped by this rain this rain that's falling relentlessly dad placed my air bed on top of their air bed and we start huddled together knees against our chest the storms fractured the skies we clung together terrified despite a small but intense gnawing in my chest there was something deliciously spine tingling about being trapped inside the tent while hell rained itself down on me so there's a shift in the way she's speaking in the sense that she's now kind of really enjoying this holiday it brings her family together even if it's the rain that brings them all together now looking at Source B and the question that came up here or rather the extract they're always thematically linked there's always a theme that kind of ties them both together so Source B is an extract from the wilderness written in 1878 by the American writer Charles Dudley Warner so here this is always going to be the Victorian text at this time some Americans were looking for adventure by camping in the wild so of course both of them are focusing in on the idea of camping that's the theme that ties them both together and of course also this idea of travel right but traveling to camp the real enjoyment of camping in the woods lies in the return to primitive conditions of living okay so now he's talking about why people are so attracted to campsites dressed in food and an escape from civilization it's wonderful to see how easy the limits of society fall off when our campers came to the bank of a lovely lake where they had hoped to enter the primitive life again this idea of everything kind of being beyond civilization everything is beautiful and unspoiled so he's like oh my gosh camping is really really gorgeous it's beautiful it's unspoiled there is a point of land jutting into the lake sloping down onto a sandy beach on which waters idly lap the forest so you've got lots of land here there's a lake the forest so there's lots of semantic field relating to nature it's untouched by the axe ranks of slender fir trees are marshalled by the shore the discoverers of this paradise is a really really powerful metaphor so you've got lots of language belonging to the semantic field of nature okay so there's a lot of semantic field of nature and also he uses this metaphor to show why camping can be so attractive to people so discoverers of this paradise which have entered to destroy so he's saying humans come to camp and they actually destroy campsites note that the babbling of stream that flows close at hand so some onomatopoeia they hear the splash of leaping fish they listen to the sweet song of the evening birds the chatter of red squirrel who angrily challenges the right to be there so here we can see that there's this kind of competition so nature doesn't want to be around man so nature hates man's influence and then they carry on by saying a site for shelter is selected the whole group is busy with the foundation so there's actually no place for them to stay unlike the first campsite this space like they have to create a shelter so the whole group is busy with the foundation of a new home this shelter this campsite the axe is resound in the echoing space great trunks fall with a crash hyperbole the use are open towards the lake and the mountains underbrush, fork stakes are driven into the ground cross pieces are laid on them and poles sloping back into the ground so here this is describing how they're building this shelter so they're building and so unlike the previous extract here we can see that they've come to like complete virgin land there's literally nothing there an incredible space of time in an incredible space of time there's a skeleton of a house and now they've created they've constructed something which is entirely open in front inside must be covered for this purpose trunks of great spruce trees are skinned so here to obviously create this shelter they have to destroy nature so this is kind of affirming what he's saying here where humans have entered these campsites to destroy it needs but a few of these skins to cover the roof and they make a perfectly watertight roof except when it rains again so just like the previous extract they're now mentioning the threat of rain during camping later whilst we eat supper a drop of two or two of rain falls the sky darkens now here there's that use of pathetic fallacy to indicate a shift tomorrow try to look for whether there's any of these shifts that happen within either or both extracts the sky darkens, the wind rises there's a kind of shiver in the woods there's the wind rising and the shiver in the woods we've got a way into the shelter taking remains of our supper eating it best as we can the rain increases so it's now really torrential rain is falling just like in source A the fire sputters and fumes all the trees are dripping dripping and the ground is wet we cannot step out doors without getting a drenching so the drenching water like sheep were penned in a little heart simile where no one can stand upright the rain swells into the open front and wets the bottom of the blankets so kind of like the author in source A who they found themselves kind of trapped this is what the rain is doing also for the people in source B so obviously we can see that there's a bit of a similarity in the campsites the rain swells into the open front and wets the bottom of the blankets we curl into our sleeping rows and try to enjoy ourselves how much better off than we are we are than many a shelter wretch so here they're saying oh you know at least we're not homeless however as we are dropping off to sleep somebody unfortunately notes a drop of water on his face so they get into the shelter and they're thinking okay we're going to be absolutely fine we're going to be okay in this rain but now they find that there's a leak okay so this is a drop of water he moves his head to a dry place then he feels a dampness in his back and he finds a puddle of water soaking through his blanket by this time somebody inquires if it's possible that the roof leaks so now this is a really uncomfortable shelter because there's all this water coming in and seeping through one man has a stream of water above him another says it's coming in his air the roof appears to be a discriminating sieve so some people getting wet others on those who are dry see no need for such a fuss the man in the corner sprays his umbrella and the protective measure is resented by his neighbour so people are now starting to argue unlike the previous one where it brought the family together these guys are kind of arguing in the darkness there's recrimination so they're now blaming each other the rain continues to soak down the fire is only half alive the bedding is damp one interesting simple sentence here is showing like nature is now really really attacking them some sit up if they can find a dry spot to sit on and smoke a few sleep where's on the morning opens cheerless so here again more pathetic fallacy is used but it's reflecting the moodiness of the people the sky is still leaking so is the shelter so it's still raining the roof is thatched up even if the storm clears the woods the woods are soaked there's no chance of going out the world is only 10 feet square they have been basically trapped in this place this life without responsibility or clean clothes may continue as long as the camper desires some would be happy to live in this free fashion forever in rain or sun so there's some people who like camping and they love this you know just being out in nature getting rained on and stuff but there are others who cannot exist more than three days without the worldly baggage so basically saying you know yes some people love this but actually you know there's other people who absolutely hate the fact that they're so exposed to nature these campers also leave and the abandoned camp is a melancholy site so now after they've done all the destruction suddenly the camp looks horrible so now moving to the final page the woods have been despoiled so now here this is where he's basically saying humans have really really destroyed this camping site so the woods have been despoiled the stumps are ugly the branches are scorched the pine leaf is trodden into the mud the ground is littered with all unsightly debris dirt of a hand-to-hand life the dismantle shelter is a shabby object so now here he's talking about what's been left behind after they kind of created this house and then now destroyed it the charred blackened logs where the fire blazed suggest the extinction of life man has wrought his usual wrong upon nature so here we've got the camping site but actually the issue is just men and human beings destroy nature and wildlife through camping so if I were looking at both questions and both extracts right so if I were looking at this source I would say more broadly obviously both of them are talking about camping right this notion of going on this camping holiday she starts off quite negative but she's more negative towards just holidays in general she hates it and obviously she's nine years old when she's recalling this right so she really really hated going on holidays especially these campsites however as the extract progresses she actually starts having a change of heart right she starts thinking oh actually don't really mind it okay I can go and muck about in the lake she starts skimming the rocks across the lake she likes the simplicity right but then by the end the rain when it starts falling actually rather than making her detest camping it brings her closer together with her family so she's like oh my gosh I totally love camping and I love the fact that we're all kind of huddled together even if there's rain everywhere it's actually brought my family together right so it ends on a really optimistic note same theme here the idea of camping there's always going to be a theme that ties both questions or rather both extracts together in tomorrow's exam right so in this case it's also to do with camping however from his perspective he first he says that camping it's good in the sense that you know it takes you back to really really basic primitive conditions but actually when it comes to camping generally what he kind of sees as negative is human beings come and just destroy nature you know they come and cause all of this chaos and then suddenly they just run off they leave right so he starts off basically being a little bit critical and also he also says oh we literally found all of this virgin land right like there's nothing built on this so then he describes how they built something but then unfortunately the rain basically still seeps through they're all kind of becoming moody with each other the rain actually brings them apart it tears them as a group apart unlike the rain bringing family members together in this extract right so this especially with the writers perspectives question but even for the question number two okay and then of course when it ends people kind of pet off they're like oh I've had enough I'm gonna go I'm gonna go and then he's kind of left thinking men have come in and just destroyed nature you know they've come into this campsite chopped down all of these trees and then they've just left all of this rubbish this debris this chaos okay so as I mentioned guys I'm literally gonna go over the responses and how to apply the framework that I've suggested where you've got you know obviously your multiple choice question for question one you shouldn't let question number one stress you then question two the summary question so what I'm gonna do is I'm literally gonna highlight to you guys how I applied the pill paragraph structure for question two of course also for question three and four and how I answered the article question that came up in this paper but more specifically I'm also gonna show you guys a model response I prepared for a speech okay because when it comes to the speech I think it has a really really high chance of coming up so I'm gonna be looking at this speech this is the one that came up in 2017 and showing you guys if you've got a speech this is a general kind of layout that you can consider general ideas and kind of how you can apply stuff like anecdotes statistics and all that stuff to your speech or your letter so looking at question number one really straightforward you're asked to look at source A from lines one to nine okay so here you're asked look at source A lines one to nine four statements that are true this one I'm not gonna go into too much detail because it's actually quite straightforward you're just looking at this first part lines one to nine selecting the bits of information that's true and then in this case it was writer's mother's happy to be going on holiday the writer thinks evil powers ruin holidays the writer thinks holidays are mental and physical challenges obviously I'm shading it in as I'm going along and then finally the writer admits that holidays can look attractive but she thinks it's a trick that's really it for question number one I don't think you should stress out for this question people tend to do well however what I now want to do is to move on and talk about question number two question two as I mentioned is the summary question this question you don't have to talk about techniques you don't have to talk about you know go into like word-level analysis or any of that you simply just say how they're similar or how they're different depending on the questions and this question you ask to look at source A and source B and you're told the writers in both sources stay in very different camping sites therefore you need to use details from both sources to write a summary of the differences between the camping sites meaning when you are answering this question my suggestion is for the eight marker try to aim to do one comparative peel paragraph if not two for this question if you are asked to compare and you're talking about both sources do not write one paragraph about source A and another about source B because that's not comparing you need to talk about both sources in the same paragraph so as I mentioned I like the peel paragraph so point evidence explanation link meaning in my opening point I'm going to talk about both sources evidence both sources explanation both sources and link for both sources so here's my opening peel paragraph and I'll show you guys how I applied this to this first peel point so I'm going to use let's see I'm going to use blue highlighter for my opening point pink for my evidence then I'm going to go for green for my explanation and purple for my link okay so looking at this first paragraph I'm going to first read and then show you guys how of integrating my summary and my discussion of both sources so the question obviously asked me to talk about the different camping sites meaning I need to make sure I include that and talk about the main differences between the two so I'll start off by saying firstly whilst the camping site in source A is full of different types of accommodations that's one key difference the site in source B only has one hut okay in fact the American site so here I'm talking about source B seems empty as the campus had to build a place to stay that's my opening point okay so this is how I integrate my comparison for both sources okay as I mentioned you want to from the start integrate and compare both sources in the same paragraph how the camping sites are quite different that's my opening point here's my evidence for both sources in source A there was a caravan and tents yet in source B there was just one shelter I've embedded my evidence for both sources here it is in pink talked about both sources now I need to talk about what does this show about these camping sites being very very different evidently source A is a well known place which people visit and many campers have set up places to stay on the other hand in source B the campsite is remote which means really far away there was no accommodation and the campers had to build a new place to stay I've highlighted and mentioned and specifically compared both sources but more specifically how are the camping sites different okay so I say firstly in source A this is what we can see in the camping site this is what we can see in source B I'm keeping it really tight in terms of my comparison for both sources then I finish off by linking and stating there was or even actually I've not even finished my explanation there was no accommodation and the campers had to build a new place to stay that's my explanation now here's my link for both sources consequently whilst the camping site in source A was filled with tents the site in source B only had one shelter for campers now that's my link for both questions in terms of their differences if you only have enough time for this question as it's worth eight marks to only write one comparative paragraph try to make sure you do so in the same paragraph don't do one paragraph of source A one paragraph of source B you have to compare and integrate your discussion talking about the similarities or differences in this case however I added an additional point so this is my second pill paragraph relation to how the camping sites are different so additionally in source A there are different facilities and forms of entertainment that's a little bit of my initial point nonetheless aside from nature there are no other facilities campus can turn to for entertainment okay so here I'm talking about there's no entertainment in source B so just quickly going back to my opening or my second point for the second pill paragraph so additionally in source A there are different facilities and forms of entertainment there's lots of things for people to do in the modern camping site but then I say aside from nature so just the natural landscape there are no other facilities campus can turn to for entertainment in source B that's my second difference between the two camping sites then here's my evidence in source A there is a table tennis hut in a pool yet in source B there are birds and fish but no man-made entertainment again I'm talking about both sources in my evidence then I'm going to now summarize how does this in the areas are different so it's clear that the camping site in source A is a popular destination for families thus there are several things to do there that's me analyzing it and going into detail beyond what I've been told in the extract that I've been given nevertheless source B's campsite seems unknown and its facilities are nonexistent that is my explanation for both sources then I simply end by linking about both sources so I finish off and round it off by saying thus the campsite in source A has different types of facilities for families that's another difference and then however the campsite in source B lacks any items or tools people can use to entertain or distract themselves that's the final difference this is almost like a bonus paragraph for the 8 marker if you can only manage to do in I would suggest 10 minutes for this question okay for the 8 marker make sure you spend max of 10 minutes before you move on if in the 10 minute window you can only do one comparative paragraph make sure you literally talk about both sources so source A and source B this is what happens here's some evidence from both sources here's some you know here's how this illustrates the campsites are different and then finish off by linking back to the question so I did it twice but you can do it once if you only have enough time to do just one for the 8 marker tomorrow now moving on to question number 3 this question should feel a little bit more familiar because it basically tests the same types of skills that you need to show in question 2 in paper 1 where you're talking about how the writer uses language to describe the rain and the storm this question also only asks you to look at one source right so it should come as a bit of a relief it's worth 12 marks try to aim to write if not two pill paragraphs try to go for the three pill paragraphs okay spend around 12 to 30 minutes on this question therefore if in 12 to 30 minutes you can do two go for your two pill paragraphs if you can do more add an additional one okay again I'm going to show you how I answered this question in terms of how the writer uses language to describe the rain and the storm in source A the modern source again so I started off by stating to begin with the appearance of the rain and the storm triggers panic I'm using keywords from the question in fact the campus scramble is a hideaway from the weather that's my opening point then I'm going to embed my evidence so the rain and the storm cause a school in activity as the sky darkened that's my evidence I'm not going to use long long bits of evidence okay I keep it really really concise take just one or two quotes max before I then go into detail okay so obviously it's this part and I've only focused in on just like a really really small bit but I'm going to now start unpacking it a bit more in my explanation so my explanation this is where I need to talk about language techniques and language devices so what do I include here Kennedy which is the author's surname for source A employs onomatopoeia as well as pathetic fallacy so I'm talking about two language techniques getting in my A02 marks to convey how much terror the rain and the storm cause to people this is how you zoom in and do some word level analysis for question number three the verb schools and I'm zooming in on one particular word for my quotation illustrates how frightened and panicked campers were when the weather darkened this is my explanation I've gone into lots of detail because I understand the examiners the bulk of the marks are stored in this part of my paragraph then I'll simply finish off by linking back to the question therefore the rain and the storm inspire panic it's clear that people flee this weather once it appears I'm talking about how the writer uses language to convey the rain and the storm I refer back to the key words in the question showing the examiner I totally understand what I'm supposed to be talking about that's my first pill paragraph point evidence explanation my explanation I talk about language techniques and then I zoom in on one particular word and I do some word level analysis then I would suggest try and make sure you do at least two of these if not three so this is now my second pill paragraph moreover the rain and the storm made the campsite extremely uncomfortable the place became dusty and a little unbreathable once the rain and the storm appeared again here's my second point in blue then I move on the rain created I embed my evidence a plume of dust that looks like steam I've taken some evidence once more from a little part of the extract I started off here I then move on to this plume of dust that looked so fine so now add that to my evidence so now this is my explanation where I'm going to unpack and talk about the language techniques that the author uses the right uses a powerful simile language to illustrate so now here I carry on to illustrate how the storm and the rain made the place dusty the noun steam zooming in conveys to us as readers how difficult the place was to breathe in due to the weather here's my explanation AO2 wrapped up right so I'm racking up these marks now finish off by linking back to the question and the keywords hence the writer portrays how the rain in the storm made the area uncomfortable and dirty that's my link back to the question then I would say if you only have enough time within 12 to 30 minutes to do just two pill paragraphs move on from question number three if you can maybe add a final pill point this is my final pill point before I move on and of course this pill point still relates to how is the rain and the storm conveyed in source in these particular line numbers this is my final pill paragraph again I start off by talking about how the rain and the storm are being shown so finally the rain and the storm are described as menacing creatures the storm specifically seems predatory as it prepares to attack of what I've also done when I'm selecting my evidence is I've taken something from the start to do with school of activity something from the middle plume of dust now I'm going to talk about what's going on in the end working through the evidence that I've been given to show my examiner I'm not lazy when selecting my bits of quotes so here is my final point the idea that the rain and the storm is shown as predatory they are predators about to attack these people these poor helpless people at the campsite here's my evidence indeed it was circling the area before attacking the site that's my evidence I've embedded my quotation and once more pay attention to the fact that I'm not literally wasting time writing long quotes keep it really concise and then unpack the quotations it's not about having like really really long quotes really long lines okay keep it concise now here's my explanation the writer's use of personification language illustrates how menacing scary the storm is again also I'm using like language like menacing predatory this is grade nine ambitious language and vocabulary so it illustrates how menacing the storm is and then I'll zoom in I'll do some word level analysis in fact the verb circling verb paints an image of a lion circling its prey before closing in and attacking it hence we can see the weather seems cruel that's my explanation then I finish off by linking back to the question as a result the rain and the storm seem intent on causing destruction the storm seems like a predator that's about to attack the campers and that's done for question number three question three should feel straightforward because it's only about one source now moving on to question number four the second comparative question with this question as it's worth 16 marks you need to not only talk about differences or similarities so in this case you also look at both sources compare how the writers convey the different thoughts and feelings about camping experience second bullet point here says compare the methods they use to convey the thoughts and feelings methods is an illusion or reference to language but also structure used by the authors I would suggest with a 16 marker try to aim to write if not two comparative field paragraphs three and in your explanation this is where you're mentioning how the writers use methods to convey the different thoughts and feelings about camping experience taking evidence from one evidence from the second integrating it doing it for at least if not three field paragraphs trying to do it twice okay so let me show you how I put together a comparative field paragraph on the writers perspective question this is question four for the 2022 exam that was sat last year okay so once more blue for my point firstly Kennedy appears pessimistic about her camping experience whilst Warner seems optimistic when considering camping if you're wondering who Kennedy and Warner are Kennedy is the surname of the first author whilst Warner is the surname of the second author so you could either say source A so the writers of source A and source B you could also say the authors of source A and source B or if you wanted to talk about both authors in a different way you could also refer to the surnames okay that's what I've done so Kennedy appears pessimistic Warner appears optimistic indeed which means in fact Warner likes the idea of retreating from society when camping yet Kennedy detests the camping experiences I'm saying how they like at the beginning okay so here I'm making it clear that I'm answering what the thoughts and feelings are but I'm starting off with how they like at the beginning okay so this is my opening point and I am talking consistently about both sources so my opening point I'm mentioning source A is like this on the other hand source A is like source B is like this here is my evidence for both sources this is for question number four in fact Kennedy believed that camping holidays were in the hands of malevolent forces that's my evidence for source A however Warner enjoyed camping's primitive conditions that's my two bits of evidence from source A and source B I'm not going to waste time writing long bits of evidence now I'm going to go into my explanation and in my explanation I need to make sure I'm talking about the writer's methods when conveying the different thoughts and feelings about camping so this is how my explanation would look like for question number four the writer of source A uses personification to highlight her initial negative feelings about camping as it was so here I'm talking about firstly how is the first author being shown right so personification is used to show her initial negative feelings about camping as it was in the hands of evil forces that's how she's feeling using personification she is she clearly disliked the idea of camping as she perceived these experiences negatively so I talk about source A first but then I then move on to analyze and to talk about the methods the writer uses in source B on the other hand the author of source B repetitively repetition which is structure method refers to the primitive conditions of camping yet in his eyes this is what makes his experience positive and unique which he enjoys so that's my comparison for source B in my explanation also ensure that I'm mentioning writer's methods second bullet point okay so compare the methods that they use to convey the thoughts and feelings now finish off by linking both of them together thus in the opening of both texts the author significantly diverge they are different in their thoughts and feelings Kennedy seems jaded which means disappointed over it and disillusioned about camping however Warner appeared upbeat and excited about his camping experiences that's my link back to the question now this is my first pill paragraph where I have talked about both sources how they different when it comes to the writer's feelings and perspectives remember question before is always feelings and perspectives first difference in my opening point in my pill paragraph then I'm going to move on to talk about evidence for both of them I'm not going to spend and waste too much time talking about you know writing long quotations I'm keeping it really really concise then in the green bit this is my explanation talking about both sources okay that's the green bit whilst in source a we can see this right thoughts and feelings so speed thoughts and feelings for the writer before I finish off by linking them back together now this is my second pill paragraph for question number four on the writers feelings and perspectives moreover both extras as both extras progress the writers begin to change the attitudes towards camping so I'm saying the both change however Kennedy is pleased to see how it brings her closer to her family yet Warner notices that camping can create divisions in his group second difference then I move on to mention the evidence so here's the evidence in source a the author is elated really really happy to realise how the rain has made them sit huddled together so that's my evidence for source a and moving on they clung together that's the evidence for source a however I need to also now include evidence from source b on the other hand there were recriminations in source b as a few sleep through the rain yet others feel dampness again I've taken just really really brief quotations from source a and source b so from source a I selected how they clung together source b I focused in and how they were arguing there's recriminations and they're like really really feeling angry so I've taken my evidence this idea of them feeling dampness drenching etc and how they're really really upset right so use that bit of evidence and as you can see I'm not using too much quotations taking one bit of quote but then going into lots of detail now here's my explanation talking about both Kennedy uses the verbs huddled and clung to emphasise how a camping experience eventually became positive as it made her bond with her family that's source a nonetheless one a simple sentence source b I'm talking about the methods that they're using a few sleep reveals how his camping experience became nightmarish evidently the adverse weather tore his group apart adverse means terrible that's my explanation talking about both sources okay and then I finish off by linking back to the question so finish off by stating as a result Kennedy begins to enjoy her camping experience as it brings her close to her family however Warner presents his experience as it fractures divides his group that is my link back to the question okay now for this question you want to spend at least 17 if not 20 minutes on this question if you look in this question and thinking okay I probably would only be able to do like two big comparative question paragraphs then do that move on to question number five however if you are able to try and do like say three really really good comparison points talking about the different thoughts and feelings this is how maybe your third point could look like okay so this is the third and final comparison paragraph before I move on to question number five finally Kennedy begins to reflect on how camping makes her appreciate the simpler things in life like nature nonetheless Warner believes camping is a terrible activity that destroys environment when he realizes how much the campers have polluted the paradise if you're wondering who Kennedy and Warner are these are the authors in source A and source B so I'm basically talking about source A and source B but using the surnames to refer back to the sources you can either say the author but also you can use the surname of writers and your examiner will know that you're talking about source A versus source B this is my final comparative point but then I embed my quotations for both of them being close to trees so this is my evidence from source A led Kennedy to feel satisfaction and pleasure and contentment however Warner was mortified to witness how this paradise was dispoiled and scorched once the campers left evidence for both sources then I'll move on to my explanation again I'm going to talk about methods that the authors use so here's my explanation as I'm rounding off my discussion in source A the writer looks on the camping site quite positively she sees it as forcing her to appreciate the beauty of nature as she uses language that belongs to the semantic field of joy to convey her positive outlook on camping semantic field is language and that's a method that she's using to convey her perspective as a writer yet Warner in source B uses negative verbs more methods to illustrate the damage humans inflict on nature when they camp he evidently takes a stand against camping by the end of the extract again here's the differences that I explain and I unpack in both questions okay or rather in both extracts but I also talk about the writer's methods I've mentioned for example semantic field I've talked about verbs and so on that is my explanation done now here's my link finishing off and rounding off my responsible question before consequently Kennedy views camping experiences as much needed as they make us appreciate nature however Warner believes camping can be terrible as it destroys nature and that's really it when it comes to question number four and how I would suggest approaching this question I would suggest make your life easy make sure you are integrating and comparing both sources so say in source B in your opening point relating to either similarities or differences very likely tomorrow's exam is going to ask you to focus on differences evidence so say in source B again how is this shown in both texts then your explanation is where you're talking about the methods that the authors use right so methods is an illusion to how's the author using language has the author using structure in both sources then you link to the question so that's the approach that I took for this entire paper or rather for this question within this exam okay now going to look at the final question this was the article that I produced relating to so I'm going to read it because it seems a little bit annotated but as you can see here what I did is firstly by the way when you look at a question like this I would suggest when planning just draw a line down the centre think about which perspective you stand on so then write what you know if some of your ideas jot them down here as your plan then of course where you'd refuse okay the statement you're given or you were given for this question is to do with the idea that holidays don't need to be far away and expensive they just need to give people a break from everyday life and a chance to relax write an article for a magazine in which you argue your point of view on this statement as I said articles have let you come up three years in a row so of course when it comes to an article you should be super super familiar with articles start off with your headline opening paragraph your main points including your anecdotes statistics and your examples all can be made up then your seconds are heading counter argument and then your closing paragraph so I'm going to walk you guys through the response that I wrote for this particular question the idea that you know holidays don't need to be expensive or far away and I agreed with this statement okay so how did I approach this article as you can see started off in my headline really brief using keywords from the question turning it into a rhetorical question because the question the statement says that holidays don't need to be expensive I just decided to make it a rhetorical question must holidays be expensive done step one done in my seven step article here's my opening discussion where I introduce what I'm talking about and which side of the argument that I stand there are a plethora of people several people I think this is always a really nice way to start a speech article or debate there are many people there are a plethora of people who believe holidays must be expensive they must be extravagant they must be far away a real holiday is an expensive getaway in Dubai Miami Florida or even the Bahamas yet I disagree I've began by stating the opposing view to create some kind of friction before I then said I disagree then I go into detail holidays need not to be expensive they certainly do not need to be far away cheap holidays can be just as relaxing as far-flung destinations in this opening paragraph I've used lots of alliteration plethora of people mix of long and short sentences to change the pace and also stuff like listing to really bring my article to life do not start your article letter of speech by saying in this speech I will in this article will in this extra in this letter I will that's really boring try to start with the opposing view the plethora of people that think blah blah blah yet I disagree I think blah blah blah that's more entertaining and more engaging for you for your examiner then so step number one is done headline step number two opening paragraph done step three first subheading is holidays can be cheap done so I'm three steps into my article now here's my first reason why I believe that this statement I agree with it right so I agree with the statement here's my first reason why I agree with it and here of course I'm going to make up some anecdotes statistics and examples so here's my first reason the idea that I truly relax in holiday must be far away is simply outrageous I'm using hyperbole dramatic language holidays spent in the UK can be just as relaxing as exotic holidays it's a mistake to assume that resting and taking time away from everyday life comes with a huge price tag this is an idiom a commonly used phrase but also of course I'm using metaphoric language rather than dreaming of an escape to the Maldives which is a place in Asia so here I'm using examples of holidays travel destinations that are really far away so rather than dreaming of an escape to the Maldives have you considered how Brighton may equally help you so here I'm saying it doesn't really need to be far away you can just go to Brighton you don't have to go all the way to the Maldives instead of looking up safaris in Kenya or South Africa why not consider an excursion up north in the Peak District rhetorical question it's picturesque it is serene most importantly and it plugs you from the daily stresses of everyday life of course what I've been doing consistently is using direct address to bring my reader in other alternatives can be Dover Cardiff, Edinburgh giving some examples the UK has many hidden jewels metaphor these holidays are equally relaxing here's my second reason for my main point or rather my main argument holidays are meant to relax us they are meant to give us a break from daily life what does that mean it simply means that holidays are designed to take us out of what can be a toxic environment places in the new location and give us a new frame of mind I've asked a rhetorical question and immediately answered it this is what we call hyperfora really powerful structural technique to use in your own writing yet this change can come in the form of a cheap 10 pound hostel in fact Sally Smith made up anecdote a university student okay so I like Sally Smith one of my anecdotes experience the benefits of taking holiday from a university during an intensely stressful time she felt her home was getting toxic paying for an overnight stay in a cheap hostel saved her it gave her perspective she returned fresh relaxed and rejuvenated rule of three fresh relaxed rejuvenated second reason why I believe holidays not need to be far away and expensive given lots of examples I've mixed up my sentences I've used a mix of literary techniques like rule of three listing all of that but also I've added my persuasive devices my anecdotes for example and of course now I need to make sure I have my made up statistics too this is my final reason for my perspective other people have greatly benefited from stay patients these are vacations at home what makes them a holiday which I will question you simply take time off school and work in switch off your technology you spend at least 24 hours reading relaxing and forgetting the daily stresses of life this is arguably one of the best ways to relax in our busy daily lives in fact gov UK totally made up statistic found that 85% of people who regularly took stay patients at home felt relaxed the mental health had improved this did not cost them anything yet it gave them unlimited joy and they relaxed so here I've made up a statistic that's a persuasive device but throughout my writing I've also included things like rhetorical questions my long and short sentences made it color added color to my writing however now I've done so I start off my headline step one opening paragraph step two first up heading step three main arguments step four now here's my step five my second subheading holidays must be expensive I'm hinting to my reader what now I'm going to talk about which is my counter argument arguing against this perspective and arguing against my perspective that holidays don't need they do need to be expensive okay so this is now the counter argument yet naysayers people who disagree with me would argue a true holiday must be far away staying in the UK will not truly relax us there are simply too many reminders of work and school so here I'm basically saying not only do I think I'm right I do understand that there's people who disagree with me the weather is always grey and dreary we need to escape the exotic locations Greece Morocco China Peru USA there's one two three four five one word sentences I have included all of these destinations will truly relax us will have access to different cultures languages and we will meet new people this will take our minds of troubles this is my first counter argument here's my second counter point why people would disagree with me I'm balancing my discussion others would contend would argue that to truly relax you need to pay a premium for this for this experience staycation does not offer you spas your home does not have qualified chefs making you five star meals it's impossible to have a genuinely amazing holiday without shelling out more money shelling out again this is an idiom a commonly used phrase indeed British airways now here my made up statistic my made up counter argument statistic British airways in a survey discovered that 70% of people who went abroad and stayed in five star results reported feeling more relaxed and happier this is something money must buy so I'm saying this this second counter argument is basically saying no no holidays need to be expensive however here's my closing discussion the final step started off my headline opening paragraph first up heading my main points I added three main points then my second subheading I've then added my second of my two counter arguments now I'm in step number seven which is my closing paragraph basically saying I've considered why people disagree with me but I still think I'm right that being said holidays need not be far away or expensive of course it's nice to climb planes and escape to far flung destinations illiteration yet if relaxation is what you are after you can still achieve rest in your country holidays can be local they can be even at home the whole point of a holiday is to help you forget about everyday life this can be done cheaply you do not need to pay you're an arm and a leg to feel rested and recharged when you're paying an arm and a leg that's hyperbole a hyperbole expression to say you don't have to pay literally so much money to go to a far away and expensive holiday so really guys that is how I would approach the article question I personally feel like there's a low chance unless AQA is feeling particularly generous there's a bit of a low chance of an article coming up as I mentioned articles have literally come up consistently for the last three years the last time a speech came up however on the other hand is in 2017 so I feel that there's a really high chance of a speech coming up also letter has come up twice there was a letter in the reset paper this was the November paper and previous to that there was a letter in 2018 so before I wrap up today's live I'm going to try and look if I feel like my comment section is glitching out to be honest I can't really see any comments but I'm going to see if I'm going to see I've kind of logged into my computer so I might check if there's any comments in my laptop okay so I might like just log in and see but if I'm not able to see the comments because I've literally glitched out I literally legit cannot see the comments so guys once obviously I wrap up today's live just jot down you know questions or anything in the comment section in the actual video once it becomes a video and then I'll answer it afterwards okay so I literally can't see comments but anyway as I mentioned guys we have now reviewed how you can write responses for this 2022 paper this is the exam that students in your position last year sat for paper 2 however I want to finally before I finish off and before I wrap up go over the only speech question that came up in 2017 now what I'm going to do is I'm going to kind of read you guys through what the question is before I then show you how you can maybe frame a speech of course when you're writing your response it doesn't have to be as long as my paragraphs I'm just kind of giving you guys stuff that you can use take the take what works for you discard the rest okay so this question this was a speech the only speech that's appeared in past AQA papers it states education one of the key topic areas hot topics is not just about which school you go to or what qualifications you gain it's also about what you learn from your experiences outside of school write a speech for your school college leavers day to explain what you think makes a good education I decided I was going to agree with this that education isn't just only about which school you go to or your qualifications it's about what you learn as I mentioned in terms of a form for a speech start by addressing your audience in this case you're speaking to your school leavers day so you begin by talking to fellow students that's step one then step two is your opening paragraph discuss where you stand on this side of the argument other side I'm going to agree so in my opening paragraph I'm going to show that I agree step number three I'm going to go into my main points reason one reason two reason three with my made up statistics my made up anecdotes step number so we've got step one audience step two opening paragraph step three main points step four counter arguments speech actually to be honest is one of the easiest forms to write about I feel with articles is a few more things to remember and even letters while speech is just main points then your counter arguments why people will disagree with you then you have your closing paragraphs step number five before you finish right at the end by thanking your audience and it can literally be as simple as thank you for your time and attention I hope you've learned something new and you're done with your speech okay so this is my model speech for this question I agree that education is not just about which school you go to or what qualifications you gain it's about what you learn from the experiences outside of school so here's my model speech so I'll begin step number one fellow students are making my audience clear okay now this is my opening discussion my opening paragraph we have just completed our GCSE exams the summer stretches out before us hyperbole you may be feeling excited ecstatic and elated as you have done really well in your exam and also I'm using loads and loads of direct address you may believe your future is set as you go to a good school and you have great qualifications yes now here I'm showing the counter view I'm saying oh you must think you know it's all about your GCSE's and you know your future is totally totally set now I'm going to I'm about to contradict that I'm creating some friction and some tension yet I do not believe GCSE qualifications in our school offers us all we need for life beyond school I'm referring back to the questions keywords that education isn't just about the school you go to it's also about what's happening outside of school educations about the experiences we have in school as well as outside of school school is just one area yet life is more complicated what we learn beyond school is equally crucial I have made it really clear that I totally agree with the statement so now I'm going to go into my main reasons in my speech let's consider I'm using inclusive pronouns let us consider the classroom environment school is quite static brief simple sentence we all sit silently and listen to our English math science history or geography teacher listing go over facts and figures which we copy and memorize yet is life really this static is it really just this basic boring it just stays the same that's what I'm asking rhetorical question think about the real world it's filled with people from different cultures different ages and different personalities I've used try colon listing rule of three take the case of Sue McDonald my made up anecdote a high achieving GCSE student who's expected to get level 9s and GCSEs she wants to be a doctor she knows yet she knows becoming a doctor isn't just about which school you go to or your qualifications it's also about your ability to work with and treat people from all walks of life hyperbole Sue is going to spend her summer working in a charity shop she knows it's to learn how to work with different people what she learns outside of school in this role will be just as important as the school and her qualifications that's my first reason in my speech now here's my second reason why I agree with the statement furthermore think about how unpredictable the real world is our lives can be chaotic alliteration we may find ourselves near someone who needs first aid help if they have fainted now here I'm giving an example of how actually you can be in one scenario in one situation where your school that you go to your GCSEs are useless this is a scenario I'm giving perhaps you are out camping and you need to light a fire without matchsticks school cannot teach us this what if you have anger management problems ellipses three dots can your teachers help with this no you need a therapist one word sentence education stretches beyond our class this is why awards like the Duke of Edinburgh award and first aid survival classes are crucial I'm giving some examples these skills can literally save lives according to a study by Cambridge University made up statistic 60% of people who completed the Duke of Edinburgh award in school felt more prepared to deal with the real world challenges what we learn outside of school is just as important as the qualifications we gain in school second reason here's my third reason why I'm basically saying school is not just about what qualifications that you gain it's about also beyond that right so school isn't just about which school you go to or rather education isn't only about which school you go to qualifications it's also what you experience outside of school so here's my third reason what about languages ritual question you may be feeling smug maybe you finish your French GCSEs and you're certain to get a grade nine do you think if I put you in Paris today you could live and work there so here I'm using example of like GCSE languages are they can we apply them in the real world probably not your GCSE simply gave you a starting point yet does it teach you slang do you know all the French you need to navigate the streets of Paris ritual question I don't think so learning a language in class is not the same as packing your staff moving to the country and picking up through walking with native speakers here's now my made up statistic a statistic by gov.uk states that 10% of people with grade nine in the French GCSE can actually speak it fluently the show's education isn't only about which school you go to or your qualifications about your experiences outside of school now I'm going to move into my counter argument so this is my first counter argument nevertheless there are many of you who will disagree with me I'm now saying okay there's some people who are not going to take my perspective you will point to certain professions a doctor a nurse a scientist can you learn open heart surgery outside of school so now here I'm referring back to the idea why education is so important okay it is about which school you go to now this is the counter view can you look after a patient and responsibly treat them outside of school absolutely not there are some professions whereby which school you go to and what qualifications you gain are absolutely crucial you cannot go around this the classroom is critical that's my first counter argument here is my second counter point furthermore we should not forget there are certain prestigious which means like fancy and really well known universities and jobs that are impossible to get into if you have not gone to the right school or gained a great qualification consider the two most competitive universities in the UK Oxford University and Cambridge University recent research from gov.uk found that attending a prestigious private school like Eton or harry school and gaining grade 9s in your GCSEs made you 80% more likely to get into oxbridge okay so this is like the idian for oxford and Cambridge also famous companies like google, apple, microsoft and tiktok only hire people from fancy schools with fancy qualifications they could not care less about what you have accomplished outside of school so these are my two counter arguments but then final step in my speech is where I'm going to say yeah yeah you know even if I've considered the counter points I still think I am right so here's my final conclusion I do agree with this to an extent it cannot be denied that what score you go to and what qualifications again are important yet this is not the only important thing education is wider than this our experiences beyond school matter consider the many wildly successful millionaires who never gained GCSE qualifications and went to schools with bad reputations there are also plenty of people who went to good schools but like drive an ambition so they never got ahead as we prepared to leave school so here I'm talking about it's a school college leavers day right so obviously I'm saying as we prepare to leave school and enter into the wide world I want to say that our lives should be balanced consider further education that is important you also consider gaining experiences outside of school you may find this is what really counts to your future then I finish off by thanking my audience final step in my speech thank you so much for your attention and I hope you've learned something new and that's really it when it comes to how to approach a speech and also to be honest if you were to get an education question tomorrow right like these are some points that you can maybe consider including in your argument I personally feel like speech has a very strong chance of coming up of course there might be really generous give you an article for the fourth year in a row but I think speech has a super super high chance of coming up okay so guys as I mentioned I'm now going to kind of wrap this up I'm going to put this phone back on the board I'm going to fire up my computer and see if there's any questions but to be honest guys what I might actually do is just finish off summing up and wrapping up like you know general points to consider with language paper to the exam obviously the 2022 exam this is the camping one that students sat last year so now let me just move you guys along and see and show you guys the board one final time before finishing off this life so actually guys what I might do is let me just move you along a little bit here we go so guys oops let me just move okay so as I mentioned guys let me just I don't know why I'm having some issues here here we go guys as I mentioned just be to recap one final time when it comes to structure this is what to anticipate of tomorrow's exam when it comes to question number five the reason why I'm emphasizing question five so much is because it's literally the make or break question okay so when it comes to question five you want to be like super super familiar with the different forms of writing and the easiest why I feel like question five is actually quite simple and straightforward to prepare for is you literally are only going to anticipate either a speech letter or an article right so to be honest once you're kind of clear on the framework to adopt the most important thing you just now need to do is to actually just have an opinion on topical issues that could potentially come up in tomorrow's exam okay and as I mentioned the main topical issues which I think it's good to maybe have a bit of an opinion on in case it comes up is to do with maybe animals, animal welfare, animal rights social media is a problem is it good is it bad more broadly even technology is it good is it bad education which is the speech that I've literally just talked about just now that was the 2017 speech the environment you know I'll be having any issues with climate change right young people are young people entitled what their attitudes like and then finally this idea contrasting privileged people versus not privileged people right rich people versus poor people okay as I mentioned I feel because travel came up last year I think that has like a super super low chance of coming up so I personally don't feel like the travel question will come up I feel maybe one of these categories will come up so just kind of figure out what your perspective is and then kind of you know so that's more you're not totally blindsided and of course just be clear on these I think the speech is going to come up maybe maybe not but of course just be clear on these and don't like super panic if you know like say you think the speech is going to come up but a letter comes up will you kind of know the layout of that if an article comes up you know the layout obviously speech you know the layout okay so guys as I mentioned my comment section has totally glitched out on my phone and so what I'm going to do is I am going to finish off this live but then what I'll do is I shall have a look at the comments if you guys have any additional questions or any final questions before tomorrow's exam I'll kind of try my best to answer them okay so guys thank you so much for joining in today's live I'm sure you guys are super excited to be done with these exams especially English obviously best of luck for tomorrow's exams as well as the remaining exams this week I know this is like a bunch of other exams chemistry maths all of those okay so guys best of luck with those exams and I shall as I mentioned I'll as you can't see anything in the comments I don't know why it's glitching out so what I'll do is I'll check if there's any additional comments maybe in an hour or so in the comment section of this video and guys I hope this helped so guys thank you so much and take care guys bye bye